2011年5月18日 星期三

Comparing--(2) John Adams and Tomas Jefferson-revised

  There are several similarities between the two significant people, John Adams and Tomas Jefferson.  First of all, they died on the same date, July 4, 1826.  Second, they were both of central importance to the American Revolution.  Third, John Adams was a delegate to the Continental Congress, and Thomas Jefferson was, too.  Next, they once assumed signers of  Declaration of Independence.  In addition, John studied and practiced law,and so did Thomas.  Finally, the two people had ever occupied the President of United States.  John Adams and Tomas Jefferson have done so many the same things that I couldn't believe it is just a coincidence.

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  1. 1.In addition, John studied and practiced law, which did the same as Thomas.
    -->incorrect sentence pattern!!!

    2.Finally, the two people both had ever occupied the President of United States.
    -->Finally, the two people had ever occupied the President of United States.

    3.John Adams and Tomas Jefferson have done so many things in the same that I couldn't believe it is just a coincidence.
    -->John Adams and Tomas Jefferson have done so many the same things that I couldn't believe it is just a coincidence.

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