2011年4月27日 星期三

Comparing--(2) John Adams and Tomas Jefferson

  There are several similarities between the two significant people, John Adams and Tomas Jefferson.  First of all, they died in the same date, July 4, 1826.  Second, they were both of central importance to the American Revolution.  Third, John Adams was a delegate to the Continental Congress, and Thomas Jefferson was, too.  Next, they both once assumed signers of  Declaration of Independence.  In addition, John studied and practiced law, which was the same as Thomas.  Finally, both of the two people had ever occupied the President of United States.

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  1. 大致OK 只是我覺得both出現太多次了!!可以換一下句型

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  2. 1)First of all, they died in the same date, July 4, 1826. 日期好像不是用in,應該是at or on 查一下吧=ˇ=
    2)In addition, John studied and practiced law, which was the same as Thomas. which後面應該是用did ,因為John studied~是動詞不是be動詞

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  3. First of~in~ in=>on
    大致上都蠻通順的喔

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  4. date好像是用on喔
    整體就都不錯

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  5. 很通順喔!但我還是覺得有結論句比較好啦!呵呵~

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  6. 是on + date!
    我喜歡你of central importance 的用法!

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