There are several similarities between the two significant people, John Adams and Tomas Jefferson. First of all, they died in the same date, July 4, 1826. Second, they were both of central importance to the American Revolution. Third, John Adams was a delegate to the Continental Congress, and Thomas Jefferson was, too. Next, they both once assumed signers of Declaration of Independence. In addition, John studied and practiced law, which was the same as Thomas. Finally, both of the two people had ever occupied the President of United States.
沒什麼問題~蠻好的!!
回覆刪除大致OK 只是我覺得both出現太多次了!!可以換一下句型
回覆刪除1)First of all, they died in the same date, July 4, 1826. 日期好像不是用in,應該是at or on 查一下吧=ˇ=
回覆刪除2)In addition, John studied and practiced law, which was the same as Thomas. which後面應該是用did ,因為John studied~是動詞不是be動詞
First of~in~ in=>on
回覆刪除大致上都蠻通順的喔
date好像是用on喔
回覆刪除整體就都不錯
很通順喔!但我還是覺得有結論句比較好啦!呵呵~
回覆刪除是on + date!
回覆刪除我喜歡你of central importance 的用法!
很通順哦:D
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