More and more people are immigrating to other countries. What promotes them to move to another country? To begin with, people are attracted by other countries’ fascinating sites. With beautiful scenery, people lead a relaxed life. Another reason is that people pursue the high quality life. Thus, they have a desire for having peace and quiet spaces and no-garbage environments and move outside from their own country. Furthermore, modernization architectures and convenient facilities better than their native nation are also one of the factors. For this, people choose to leave for the places, where are their ideal heavens. Some people immigrate to the foreign land for further education. They can learn not only the regional language but cultures there. They consequently decide to move to where they want to live in. Finally, people enjoy contacting with local residents and foreigners in the bustling exotic country. They can even make friends with many kinds of people around the world. So, I think maybe that is also the main reason why people look forward to moving to another country.
Furthermore, modernization architectures and convenient facilities better than their native nation are also one of the factors. (better 前面沒有be動詞好像怪怪的,可是我又不知道到底要不要加)
回覆刪除They consequently decide to move to where they want to live in. (where好像要改成which,因為後面有in)
每次都寫很多,每次都寫很好。
Another reason is that people pursue the high quality life. Thus, they have a desire for having peace and quiet spaces and no-garbage environments and move outside from their own country.
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Another reason is that people have a desire for having peace and quiet spaces with no-garbage environments for the high quality life. Thus, they move outside from their own country.
理由很不錯~很有說服力
*They consequently decide to move to where they want to live in.in 不用留著唷!
回覆刪除*in the bustling exotic country 我覺得要加and,bustling and exotic。
諦諦每次都寫很好!!
they have a desire for having peace and quiet spaces and no-garbage environments and move outside from their own country.
回覆刪除and可以少一些,在最後一個詞前面加and就好,其他用逗點隔開
其他都蠻好的~!