John was one of the outstanding athletes. He participated in many competitions which he usually came out on top in. When he was a teenager, he joined a big race held in the gym. He felt very nervous because the race was important for him. When it was his turn, he stood on the playground with his heart beating quickly. He started to run when the race began. He soon surpassed above all his rivals and reached the finishing line. He won first prize!
Sad to say, as soon as he arrived at the finishing point, someone knocked him down with carelessness. John fell down and broke one of his legs. He was sent to hospital immediately and was diagnosed that his leg must be amputated because it was injured so seriously. After the operation, he stayed in the hospital, looking frustrated.
Despite his pain, he still insisted on attending the ceremony. When he showed up on the stage, everyone cheered for him and respected for his courage from the bottom of their heart. It was the most glorious and unforgettable moment in his life when he received the award belonged to him. His perseverance and unflinching will are what we should learn.
unflinching是形容詞吧
回覆刪除will are 這樣就有兩個動詞了
暈暈那個will好像叫做意志然後那個un~ing好像是要形容will的樣子
回覆刪除然後我剛剛看了39的現在看你的覺得你好厲害所以我找不到錯誤囉~
perseverance(名詞) and unflinching(形容詞)
回覆刪除and是對等連接詞,詞性要一樣吧!
will are怪怪的,應該是will be吧!
看了以上三點我覺得miniface是對的XD
回覆刪除Despite of his pain,應該是沒有of
回覆刪除其他都寫的很好
will are 是will be
回覆刪除其他的都和大家一樣了!
He was sent to hospital immediately 中的hospital應該加the
回覆刪除看來大家對最後一句都有不同想法呢~
回覆刪除我覺得 will是"意志力"而unflinching是個形容詞要修飾will,而and 則是連接兩個名詞(perserverance和will),所以我覺得諦諦沒寫錯喲~